Prompt 1 of Common App
ome students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story. [650 word limit] 0 SOURCES NEEDED
Prompt 1: Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story. [650 word limit]
The fundamental issue with my writing is not a lack of expansive vocabulary or grammar mastery. I simply lack the creative voice necessary to express myself and my life's story in an engaging, impactful manner. It would be of great value for me to have you help me with the creative aspect of my writing. The task at hand is writing a college personal statement which responds to the prompt listed under "Topic." There is a word limit of 650 words, but please leave a hundred words or so for me to add in any additional details where it is needed. The quality I expect is something of the likes of the "Costco Essay" which can be found with a simple Google search directing you to an article published by Business Insider. Here is a portion of the essay mentioned so that we know we're on the same page:
"Managing to break free from my mother’s grasp, I charged. With arms flailing and chubby legs fluttering beneath me, I was the ferocious two year old rampaging through Costco on a Saturday morning. My mother’s eyes widened in horror as I jettisoned my churro; the cinnamonsugar rocket gracefully sliced its way through the air while I continued my spree. I sprinted through the aisles, looking up in awe at the massive bulk products that towered over me. Overcome with wonder, I wanted to touch and taste, to stick my head into industrialsized freezers, to explore every crevice. I was a conquistador, but rather than searching the land for El Dorado, I scoured aisles for free samples. Before inevitably being whisked away into a shopping cart, I scaled a mountain of plush toys and surveyed the expanse that lay before me: the kingdom of Costco. "
Essentially, what I need is for my life's story and my characteristics to be expressed in a creative, memorable, and impactful manner. I will provide you with my details below. If you need additional information, please contact me at email@example.com
My dad has failing health which impedes his ability to work. So, we're really poor. As a result, I was forced into a situation where I needed to make money for my family at a young age. Naturally, I developed a mind for business. I also became resilient, hardworking, and independent. When I was young, I started selling snacks to other kids for much higher than what I paid for. I wrote content that garnered an audience of 2 million and made money. I worked an internship in marketing for a company which strove to protect the environment. I artificially inflated the value of an item through market strategies. I successfully invested in penny stocks in the stock market. I held an internship at a medical clinic where I gained medical experience and handled clerical work. I worked another internship at a shop where I handled administrative tasks. I work as an english tutor and currently aid disabled students. I am a nonconformist too, if that holds any relevance. I don't have extracurriculars because I needed to focus on my family and academics.
Feel free to express everything in a way you feel would make for a fun and engaging piece! If you need more time due to writer's block, please let me know. I value quality more than anything else.